Question

Alguien que sepa ingles me puede decir si esto esta bien escrito y tiene coherencia? es que es para un examen.

My name is Johamir Haro. I am 24 yeards old . I am from Venezuela. I am Venezuelan. I am a student. I am crazy. I am mad. My English class is at 8:45 to 10:15 a.m. on mondays to fridays in the morning. My lunch time is at 12 o clock at noon. My study time is at 3:15 to 4:00 p.m in the afternoon. My dinner time is at 7:30 to 8:15 p.m. at night.


My mother ´s name is Mirla Machado. She is 44 yeards old. She´s from Caracas Venezuela. She is Venezuelan. She is a homemaker. She is shy. She is angry. She goes to gym at 8:30 a.m. on mondays to fridays in the morning. Her lunch time at 12:00 to 1:30 p.m at noon. Her dinner time is at 8:30 to 9:15 p.m at night.


My father´s name is Juan Haro. He´s 45 yeards old. He is spain. He is spanish .He a teacher. He is a creative. He is stressed . He goes to university at 8:20 to 10: 20 a.m. in the morning. His lunch time is at 12:40 to 1:20 at noon. His dinner time is 8:30 to 9: 20 p.m at night.

Answer 1

esta muy incoherente, diría que que juntes todas tus pequeñas oraciones en una sola, por ejemplo:
My name is Johamir Haro, I am 24 years old. when I was a child I was born in Venezuela, that's why I am Venezuelan....

Answer 2

se escribe years corrigelo por favor.... esta bien pero debes agregar algunos conectores porque en si solo estas indicando ideas y ya... como then ,sometimes,often,add, entre otros