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Social media are dangerous

Today, there are many people addicted to social media who feel a great need to share their life with others. In my opinion, this is not good.

First, social media distort reality because there are many people who try to show a "perfect life" uploading photos. This is not good because it is not real life, but a fictional life trying to show a perfect reality.

On the other hand, social media waste a lot of time. Addicted people spend a lot of time procrastinating and don't spend time with their lives. Instead of doing sports, studying or working, they spend too much time on social media.

In short, social media can be bad for our health and makes us see a different reality. Therefore, I think that we should take more control over ourselves and we should focus on our health, work and studies, instead of being aware of social media. ​

Answer 1

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