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Where to begin, my name is Adele, I am 14 years old and with my brother Paul ... something surprising happened to us last year. My mom is a scientist as an intelligent person she is, she created a TV, unlike all of them, one that you can see the past and be there. One day we were bored, so we invented a game and we need something from my mom's basement. Upon was enter we found what we needed but saw a box and as curious we opened it and saw that it was an old TV. We turned it on and it started to go wrong ... and all of a sudden we were traveling inside it. We saw wars, dinosaurs and at one point we stopped in the past ... we didn't know where we were? My brother started crying, I saw around me vegetation, a village and two boys behind me, dressed in fur ... and there I figured it out we were in the Neolithic.
These children stole our control, so we chased them to the village once there, we searched everywhere and we saw the children, we took control of it, and I touched all the buttons and it something wrong, I hit it and it worked when we got to my house my mom was crying until she saw us, the days passed we talked about this but she told us to tell anyone, but I can't take it anymore, I hope you understand me.

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